Whoa! That is quite a weapon effect.
Why wouldn’t you think an open live wire would shock you?!
Always a bald man with glasses running the machete.
There are likely supplies there.
Why would that idiot run towards him when they both had guns?
Certainly unique looking things.
Make it 309 so it looks organic.
As they get dirtier their shirts take on the same color.
He found a hat too.
I understand but I never like leading padding zeros.
No one ever talks about the smell of people who have been living in the post apocalypse.
That is a LOT.
If you are going to hide then turn off the flashlight.
Too many long pauses.
Unsatisfying ending.
This only technically qualifies as action.